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I have never been a flower by ~frazzled-mage:iconfrazzled-mage:



A syncopated samba of color-drenched wings
Brought you to light
Ever so briefly upon my petals
Then you darted and slipped lazily skyward again.
©2007-2009 ~frazzled-mage
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Author's Comments

As a brief piece I hope that I captured enough emotion and detail to make this complete for the reader. Let me know what you think.

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:iconchattycat28:
I fear my comment will be longer than your poem but here goes, the first line is very descriptive and different from the other three. dancing brightness is what I get from that line, an interesting combination. the last line presents one of those questions, can something dart and slip lazily? If you say so I quess it can.

this is another one that seems to show us such a brief moment, but one filled with images and feeling. I just wish some your important moments would last a little longer so I could have more than a quick glimpse.

I love the poem and the feeling of wanting something to last just....
:iconsatah:
Amazing... long enough to get the point across, but short enough to leave you wondering. I can feel the silence after the end-- if that makes any sense. I dunno; I guess I mean that if this were read out loud, there would be like this lovely silence after the end so everyone could absorb it.

That's a good thing. P:

Seriously lovely. @3@ <3

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Wowza! How awesomesupremo! That\'s just so ulticooliolicious!
:iconfrazzled-mage:
It certainly makes sense to me ;) I was hoping that the silence would carry into the air and give the reader pause to think. Thank you for giving me some confirmation! I always smile when I write one that you :+fav:. It means a great deal to me. Thank you for your time and your comments!

jfk

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youarerighthereyouhavetakenthespaceoutofmywords
:iconfrazzled-mage:
Of course it can! especially because I said so ;) :D You know I wish some of the moment lasted much longer as well. But the moment was even shorter than the poem :nod: its memory will last much longer however...

jfk

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youarerighthereyouhavetakenthespaceoutofmywords
:iconchattycat28:
yes, good memories last a lifetime
:iconfrazzled-mage:
yes they will always be there forever. Won't they. ;)

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youarerighthereyouhavetakenthespaceoutofmywords
:iconblueskye27:
There's something very sensual about this little piece. I like it. :aww:
:iconfrazzled-mage:
It was in the top 10 for sensual moments in teh last 10 years. Glad you liked it.

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youarerighthereyouhavetakenthespaceoutofmywords
:iconblueskye27:
Sounds delicious like your poem...

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